Computer Essay Ielts

Computer Essays

by Lyzze


Are computers a good thing?

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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on children.

Do you agree or disagree?



In modern societies the number of time children spend surfing the internet have increased. Computers are one of the major technological device used around the globe. It is present in our homes, schools and working environment. Children who used the computer daily are exposed to a wide Range of information that can help them academically, socially and professionally. Despite these benefits some people argues that if children over used the internment the results can be quite damaging.

Children who spend quality time on the internment are exposed to a huge amount of information that can help them to improve their grades and complete research. For example, while attending college almost everyone had a laptop to store information, and search for answers to questions that were very complicated. Theses student preformed better on exams because they became independent learners. Without the help of teachers they are motivated to use the internet to gain the information, as a result they retain more that if they were taught.

Also, the internet is used as a medium for communication, as social network such as twitter and Facebook are great ways for children and teenagers to communicate and express their feelings to friends and relatives. This alternatively help them to communicate better. Further more, children are developing life long skills that are necessary for the job market. Most companies, requires that employees are computer literate, and spend thousands of dollars training their staff, so when they are filling vacancies they employ those who are already computer literate. Therefore, parents who allow their child or children to surf the internet on a daily basis are helping them to develop critical skills.

On the other hand, there are long term effects that are associated with over use of the internet. These problem includes health issues like obesity, which can develop when children become addictive to the computer and decrease their outdoors activities. Moreover, this can also lead to antisocial behaviour. If children spent too much time using the internet and less time acquiring skills necessary for social interaction they can find it difficult to communicate appropriately. The most damaging aspect of spending too much time online, is the use of phonographic materials that can devalue the values parents are trying to instill in their children. These websites are everywhere online, even if your child is on an educational site they can pop up there as well ,and trying to close the site won't work, as they open automatically. Due to this the internet can be considered as unsafe for children.

Overall, in my view, using the internet on a daily basis have both pros and cons, that are of equal important to young people. Therefore, parents need to have rules as to which site their children visit and the amount of time they spend online.

Computer Dependence

by ragini
(India)

Students are becoming weaker in reading and writing as they are depending on computers very much. Teachers should enforce them to reduce this habit.

Do you agree or disagree?


Undoubtedly, relying on computers are making the students handicapped in reading and writing skills to a very large extent. Of course, teachers must discourage this dependence on computers for their students.

In a last few decades, computer has not only touched the business but also it is incorporated profusely in education. The primary class students have their personal I-TABS, instead of books in their hands. So they do have the habits to type on monitor of computer and are not used to writings on text books. Moreover, computer auto-correct the spellings and grammatical mistakes and the students no more take care of them and become worse in their writings. Additionally, most of the teachers notes, the students get in the form of word or power point presentations, which are up to the point. And students no more use to read the vast content of books and gradually getting poor in reading too.

Certainly, teachers can play a vital role in improving their students writing and reading skills. Because school is the very first learning point and teachers are the first-step educators for them. And if they encourage the students to bring books, textbooks, and pens instead of computers to the school. They likely to do same. Secondly, teachers should move to traditional methods of teaching instead of advanced method of teaching and learning. for example; using the book, reading method, dictation method instead power point presentation.

To recapitulate, computers have made the students addicted for them, so their reading and writing skills are not worth it, and teachers are the only guides to them; so as improve their habit of overuse of computers and reinforce their study skills.

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Impacts on Young Children

by Renu rai
(Ludhiana)


Do computers impact on children?

Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effects on young children.

Do you agree or disagree?


Modern era is technological era. Computer become a integral part of our life. Youngsters use it in many ways. In my opinion it has more positive impacts than negative on young generation.

First of all, Computer help the children in their studies. They search many type of information related to their studies through internet. They get more ideas related to any particular topic which enhance their knowledge.

Secondly, it helps to improve there skills. With the help of social sites like facebook, twitter they interact with their friends, kith-kin. It helps them to increase their capability to communicate with others. Moreover, they become perfect in their work, they become literate in computer. Which would help them in their career also. Then everywhere is demand of computer it would helps to organisations to find perfect match for job. Then, they need not to trained staff, they can get efficient persons.

However, one of the major drawback is that it invite many health problems among young children they spent long hours in front of computers which effect on their eyes, obesity is another problem for them. Furthermore it increase gap between parents and their child they spent most of their time on computer rather than talk to their guardian.

In nutshell, I would like to say that even computer has many pros and cons. Parents should fix sometime to use the computer and also restrict on websites.

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Chidren and Everyday Use of Computers

by Gloria
(Sydney)

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children.

Do you agree or disagree?


The application of technology has led to dramatic changes to our modern society, while the use of computers for children daily, however, has caused a debate among parents and teachers.

Through using computers, children could have easy access to information and update themselves quickly. The Internet provides a wide variety of information about the current affairs and children could use it as a platform to gain knowledge and form a reading habit. Also, computer-generated animations can be an educational tool for them to understand the development of technology and those English motivated cartoons such as Cinderella and The Lion King can teach children the right and wrong which is more efficient than the force-feeding teaching method.

The disadvantages that related to the widespread use of computers for children, however, can not be ignored as well. Children are those groups of people who have no self-control and can be easily addicted to computer games and entertainment programs, which may not only occupy too much homework time but also can cause children inattentive in class.Plus, staring too much time on the screen may lead to headache and eyestrain and as they reduce the time to interact with their peers face to face, the feeling of isolation and lonely will be increased. Both of those problems could pose threat to children's health physically and emotionally.

Overall, personally I suggest that parents and teachers are supposed to supervise and restrict the time that children used on computers, and only when they gain the skill about the allocation of time, can they be allowed to use computers autonomously.

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Reliance on Computers Essay

by hamdaan

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Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers.

What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?


It is often argued that today’s generation are more addicted to computers. This essay deals with the problems associated with dependence on computers and then gives a solution.

Often children are reliant on gadgets for any piece of information they want and they end up spending a large proportion of their day on computers. Also, youngsters now-a-days get ready made information without much effort and become very lazy, as a result become obese and has brought about intricate problems in children. Researchers believe that spending more than 8 hours on electronic devices can increase heart attack rate manifold times. For instance, if a child spends 6 hours on computer per day, this will affect the retina of the eyes, also leads to postural imbalance and lack of social behavior towards others.

This problem can be tackled by increasing awareness among children through schools, universities . Moreover, parents must also be informed about the negative aspects of spending too much time online. Though children are responsible enough for their actions, parents also must keep an eye for any noticeable behavior, also parents must encourage their children on spending more time outdoors. As an example, educational institutes must encourage students to do more offline research such as survey or opinions of different people on day-to-day issues.

In conclusion, one of the major problem with over-use of technology is that children get detached from others and become lazy since all the information they need is given to them easily.

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This is one of my model IELTS essays lessons where you can

  • read the essay
  • do a vocabulary exercise
  • get a full lesson on how to write the essay

Read the IELTS computer technology essay

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

As we move into the twenty-first century, it is clear to see that we have become more and more dependent on computers and information technology. This technology now reaches into almost every area of our lives and it is easy to predict that this phenomenon is only going to grow. My personal belief is that this presents a variety of dangers.

It is highly likely that in the future there will be comparatively few aspects of our lives that will not be influenced by computer technology. The probability is that it will control more and more forms of communication, transforming fields such as education and business when video-conferencing platforms become more stable. It might even affect romance with more people forming relationships online.

While there may be benefits to this technological revolution, there are also a number of potential dangers. Perhaps the most serious of these would be  that if people rely on computers too much for communication, they could in fact begin to communicate less well. For example, if every member of a family had their own computer screen and smart phone, they might speak less and less often to one another and simply look at a screen. This would be serious because our ability to communicate is an essential part of our humanity.

My conclusion is that the growth of computer technology is inevitable, but that this may not be entirely positive. Just one area in which it is possible to foresee dangers is communication, and if we are going to ensure that computers do not become a negative influence, we need to think carefully how we use them.

Practise using the essay vocabulary

Learn how to write the essay

Thinking about the question

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

A double question

The first point to note about the question is that there are in fact 2 questions. This is quite common in IELTS essays and it very, very important that you answer both halves of the question or you will be penalised heavily for Task Response.

The open question

The first question is an open question: “What will it be used for in the future?”. In a way, this is the harder question as you need to think yourself of 2/3 areas in which computers will be used in the future. There are a number of possibilities here, just a few are:

  • education
  • communication
  • transport
  • personal robots

You do not need to be very imaginative. There are no prizes for originality. I’d suggest you pick 2 areas and briefly explain how they might be used in the future, perhaps contrasting what happens now.

The closed question

The second question is a “Yes/No” question. Note that you must directly provide an answer to the question. You should also see that it is quite possible to answer it with a “Slightly” answer by saying that there are equal benefits and dangers to computer technology. The trick to answering this question is to give a reason why for your answer.

Making your answer coherent

I have two suggestions to make the essay coherent. The first is to make sure you explain  your ideas . This means explaininghow the technology will be used in the future, rather than just listing different areas in which it will be used in and also explaining why it may or may not be dangerous.The second idea is to try and link your paragraphs together. One way to do this is to refer to the same ideas about how computer technology when you write about the possible dangers.

Structuring the essay

There are 2 main possible structures for this essay. One is to write a topic paragraph about each question and a separate conclusion. The other is to write 2 topic paragraphs about how computers will be used in the future and then use the conclusion paragraph to answer the second question. If you take this second approach, be sure to write a complete paragraph for your conclusion, or the examiner may think you have not answered the question fully.

Grammar and vocabulary

This question asks you to write about the future. Be sure to try and vary your future language. It is important to use different structures to get a good band score; it is not enough just to avoid mistakes.You also want to try and avoid using the word “computer” all the time and try and find some varied vocab.

Read the essay notes

Here is my sample essay with notes. 

As we move into the twenty-first century, it is clear to see that we have become more and more dependent on computers and information technology. This technology now reaches into almost every area of our lives and it is easy to predict that this phenomenon is only going to grow. My personal belief is that this presents a variety of dangers.

It is highly likely that in the future there will be comparatively few aspects of our lives that will not be influenced by computer technology. The probability is that it will control more and more forms of communication, transforming fields such as education and business when video-conferencing platforms become more stable. It might even affect romance with more people forming relationships online.

While there may be benefits to this technological revolution, there are also a number of potential dangers. Perhaps the most serious of these would be  that if people rely on computers too much for communication, they could in fact begin to communicate less well. For example, if every member of a family had their own computer screen and smart phone, they might speak less and less often to one another and simply look at a screen. This would be serious because our ability to communicate is an essential part of our humanity.

My conclusion is that the growth of computer technology is inevitable, but that this may not be entirely positive. Just one area in which it is possible to foresee dangers is communication, and if we are going to ensure that computers do not become a negative influence, we need to think carefully how we use them.

(273 words)

Varying vocabulary

influence/affect/control are 3 similar words. See how I vary my vocabulary, rather than just repeating the same word.

Being academic

This essay is quite academic in tone. This is because I do not always use “is” and “will”. Rather I choose to lots of modal verbs such as would, might and may.

Matching the introduction and conclusion

The essay is extremely coherent. Part of the way I achieve this is by matching my introduction and conclusion. This is an easy trick to learn and will certainly help your essay writing.

 

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